This seems to me to be as carefully crafted as the first chapter.
I'm not sure what you continue to mean by 'you're not sure where you are going with this.' Is that just in the sense that you do not know what hardships the characters will face and how they will solve them; both the explore team and the rescue party. (And I have to say I'm curious how your going to get the expole group rescured/off planet if no one can fly). Or are you looking for direction in the sense as what kind of story you are trying to tell? After these first two chapters, your story screams "Adventure" to me.
An adventure story can be just that, an adventure, with no huge spark challenging decisions pressed upon the characters envolved. Of course tossing in spark challenging situations and some anxiety, sorrow, worry, angst in general, etc. to various characters just adds to the richness of the storyline. ANd you have done that well in both this chapter and the first one. Delving into Primes thoughts on Blaster and his cassettes was a tantilizeing tidbit, as well as Eject thinking on Rewind.
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Date: 2009-03-23 08:38 pm (UTC)I'm not sure what you continue to mean by 'you're not sure where you are going with this.' Is that just in the sense that you do not know what hardships the characters will face and how they will solve them; both the explore team and the rescue party. (And I have to say I'm curious how your going to get the expole group rescured/off planet if no one can fly). Or are you looking for direction in the sense as what kind of story you are trying to tell? After these first two chapters, your story screams "Adventure" to me.
An adventure story can be just that, an adventure, with no huge spark challenging decisions pressed upon the characters envolved. Of course tossing in spark challenging situations and some anxiety, sorrow, worry, angst in general, etc. to various characters just adds to the richness of the storyline. ANd you have done that well in both this chapter and the first one. Delving into Primes thoughts on Blaster and his cassettes was a tantilizeing tidbit, as well as Eject thinking on Rewind.
It's a great 'verse you have created here.
You picked a good place to end the chapter.